TheBanyanTree: Comments/Critique

[Dale M. Parish]

On Apr 6, 2010, at 11:39 AM, Pat M wrote:

> Hi all,
>
> Well, I've finally started writing again and have also joined a local
> writers' group. I'm going to write a book.  Here is the introduction  
> or
> first installment. If anyone has the time, please let me know if any  
> parts
> are confusing or awkward.  Any suggestions to improve it will be  
> greatly
> appreciated.  Thanks.  I realize this isn't the venue for my  
> request, and of
> course, there is no obligation to even read it let alone comment on  
> it.


Welcome back.  I like it and have no criticisms.

Hugs
Dale
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Dale M. Parish
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